1.) For a moment, I had forgotten how she started this essay. It didn't really draw me into the story until I got to the second paragraph. I can't say that's any of her fault. For me, I really enjoy the story, the body if you will, of an essay. So, I can't actually say if it were good or bad. But, I do have to say that it summed up the moral of the story before I even got to it. It was a good little foreshadowing.
3.) Humorous - 1. ..."when they think about about how their mother picked them up from school last week wearing orange polyester pants and a green shirt"...
2. "So what if Jeni sucks at soccer?"
3. ..."polyester doesn't bother me."
I would have to disagree with the idea that the author's technique to begin the story was forgetful, with all due respect. I think that she hits a nerve for all readers, or at least grabs their attention, indifferent to the relationship the readers might have shared with their parents.
ReplyDeleteI don't think the author's introduction was necessarily forgetable, but it failed to leave me with a lasting impression. I was raised with extrememly non-parental parents, and therefore, the introduction was completely unrelatable to my relationship with my parents, so I guess this means I disagree with the both of you.
ReplyDeleteI appreciate the humorous tone you gatherd from the piece. I went for a more sentimental approach, but I can definitely agree to the idea of humor in this one.
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